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Monday, November 28, 2022

 In class, we are trying to persuade our family to let me go to Survivor 2022. 

I have learnt what a counter-argument is. My reflection is to re-read my work and make my sentences sensible. So the reader can understand it. I have used a lot of figurative and new sentence types in my persuasive writing.

Here is what I have written to convince a reader:



Have you ever participated in the challenger - Survival night? This week we are doing Survivor 2022 at Waima Forest. I think I should go to survival night. Year 5 - 6s are doing survival night, safely on school property with all materials supplied. This is so they are prepared for the Survivor, which is when the 7 - 8s go do theirs in the wild bush, with nothing but a tarpaulin and hot water and hot water. 


The reason I think I should go to Survivor 2022 is that it will be a good learning opportunity to learn new survival skills. If you don't let me go I will miss out on how to make food by myself with nature. On these days, we are going to be doing lots of bush safety and rules around the bush. So now if I go I won't burn down our backyard… Again. So that will be a great learning improvement. And yes, we will be doing more active learning instead of sitting in a seat 5 hours a day. When I say active learning I don't just mean sports hard-even though I would love to- we will be monitoring birds, such as the Saddleback that I have never seen before. That will definitely make me stop talking too much cause we will have to be silent. There's another big learning improvement. Won't you love it if I stop talking and irritating your morning and afternoon? I know you will. Plus if I get to go I will learn how to make a tent using Waima Forest's resources- NO teachers or Parents will be helping me and my group. It will be a magical experience to look at the stars. And just for extra information, I will be learning about hut etiquette. A hut etiquette is rules like taking your shoes off at the front doorstep or putting the mattress up against the wall when finished with them. Obviously. Because there is a D.O.C hunt there -Framtons hut- which has a toilet and it's a sturdy house so if the wind screamed through the forest I can go into the D.O.C hut. So please can I go? Survivor 2022 is going to be such a great learning opportunity. Please.


Another reason why I should be going is, because the days we will be at Waima Forest will be amusing and exciting. It could be a tremendous experience. We will be going to a water hole in the wildlife. Going swimming and the boys doing manu’s that will explode like a grenade. If you don't agree with me you will be robbing my memories with new people-like new kids-I will get to bond with. We will be having delicious, appetizing marshmallow smores. Can you just imagine how devastating it will be if  I miss out on my first-ever smore I have ever had? It's better now than never. If you think I will get fat from this, we are doing a 2-hour hike. Twice. As well as that we will be achieving crazy, new activities, like the brand new Sir Challenge-this will include a mystery food challenge - that will make me step out of my comfort zone! Also, if I get food poisoning, three of the supervisors are fully medically trained. The more challenges I do, the braver I get! Everybody should know you have to play spotlight when camping with heaps of friends or family. “I did think it was fun. The experience was very enjoyable. I really liked the hike.” Said Zoe It would be sad for me if I don't miss out on this opportunity. It will be so miserable at home. Bored, lonely, isolated- do you want this to happen to me? So, please strongly agree this is a good opportunity.


I would like to go to Survivor 2022. It will be like hiking up our local mountain. It will be an entertaining, awsome day. It will be a great learning opportunity to learn brand new skills. Also It will be amusing and exciting for me. Plus, it's going to make me step out of my personal bubble and go spend time out in the safe bush. So can I go to Survivor 2022? Please!